To: Shirley Mary Alexander
From: Tay Qi Yun Jovin
Date: 20 January 2019
Subject: Self Introduction
Dear Ms. Shirley,
My name is Jovin Tay and I am currently pursuing a degree in Hospitality Business (with honours) at Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT). Prior to my university education, I graduated with a diploma in Customer Relationship and Service Management at Republic Polytechnic (RP). Coming from a related course of study, it allowed me to better understand if this was something I wanted to achieve at the end of my educational path. This was further elevated after completing my internship at Wildlife Reserves Singapore (WRS), River Safari.
Being in the hospitality industry for five years now has allowed me to be more sensitive when speaking to people – be it family, friends or to my guests when at work. After all, we are nothing but humans with feelings, and no one should feel hurt from the words of others. I believe that this is one attribute that is important not just in my industry, but in every other industry too.
However, one weakness of mine is that I am unable to speak in front of large crowds for a long period of time; I tend to forget my words or speak really fast. However, I believe that this is a journey that I am willing to take and change for the better.
However, one weakness of mine is that I am unable to speak in front of large crowds for a long period of time; I tend to forget my words or speak really fast. However, I believe that this is a journey that I am willing to take and change for the better.
Therefore, my goals for this module are to overcome this fear of mine, as well as to better understand the thoughts of others through this module. I strongly feel that the lessons and theories in this module will allow me to achieve these goals, to demolish the barriers that will allow me to be able to excel in this industry.
Thank you for making this module more interesting to learn, with the introduction of skits from our peers to allow us to understand the theories in this module.
Best regards,
Tay Qi Yun Jovin
Hi Jovin!
ReplyDeleteI feel this is very well written as it is both clear and concise. However, I would recommend merging your strengths and weaknesses together in one paragraph. This will create a better flow and make the paragraph look more beefy. All the best in overcoming your weakness! I'm sure you will master your confidence soon enough :)
Hi Jovin,
ReplyDeleteI agree with Rachel that your self-introduction is really well-written as mentioned by Rachel in the previous comment! Nothing much to change in my opinion. However, just a minor amendment for your second last paragraph, first sentence. You may want to remove the second "through this module" as the last part of the sentence, it will still make sense without it since you already had that at the start of the sentence.
With that, overall it's gooooood. Have a great day ahead and see you in class!
ReplyDeleteDear Jovin,
Great introduction you have there! I enjoyed reading it and could hardly spot any mistakes. The way you explained your strength and weaknesses was pretty straight forward and easily understandable.
However, I feel that you can remove all the acronyms of places such as “SIT”, “RP” and “WRS” as they did not reappear again in your post.
Coincidentally we have the same weakness & I am confident that we will be able to overcome this weakness together as one! Lets work hard together! :)
Cheers,
Jiayun Sin